Hi!! I like how you videoed yourself in the reflection of the window- it fits nicely with the rest of your poem. You read the poem clearly and with emotion that made me feel like this topic is one that you feel strongly about. One thing that confused me slightly is that in the beginning of the poem it says "cloudy windowpane" and at the end it says "crystal clear windowpane" but the image that is seen through the windowpane remains the same! I was expecting something different now that the window is clear. Maybe changing the image a bit could help bring across your point in the poem even further. Nice job!!
Hi!! I like how you videoed yourself in the reflection of the window- it fits nicely with the rest of your poem. You read the poem clearly and with emotion that made me feel like this topic is one that you feel strongly about.
ReplyDeleteOne thing that confused me slightly is that in the beginning of the poem it says "cloudy windowpane" and at the end it says "crystal clear windowpane" but the image that is seen through the windowpane remains the same! I was expecting something different now that the window is clear. Maybe changing the image a bit could help bring across your point in the poem even further. Nice job!!